You have used a good structure to help with the clarity, however you must use paragraphs!
You have raised some excellent points within your response and provided necessary evidence, however at points your explanation loses focus from the question. You waver slightly from the question and discuss how a pre-watershed audience might be influenced, but the question asks how a media text will be influenced. Make sure you read the question and answer exactly what is being asked - taking certain words out and adding in 'influences 'Cuffs' would have allowed me to award you more marks!!!
Your second point (ethnical equality) is a little jumbled. Avoid repeating yourself and make sure you write clearly. Again, you must make sure you answer the question being asked and specifically provide evidence from the episode.
A lovely timeline, with the relevant contexts! Good job.
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ReplyDeleteYou have used a good structure to help with the clarity, however you must use paragraphs!
You have raised some excellent points within your response and provided necessary evidence, however at points your explanation loses focus from the question. You waver slightly from the question and discuss how a pre-watershed audience might be influenced, but the question asks how a media text will be influenced. Make sure you read the question and answer exactly what is being asked - taking certain words out and adding in 'influences 'Cuffs' would have allowed me to award you more marks!!!
Your second point (ethnical equality) is a little jumbled. Avoid repeating yourself and make sure you write clearly. Again, you must make sure you answer the question being asked and specifically provide evidence from the episode.
Miss C
I will look over and read my exam question, next time I will focus more on the question- G
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